Friday, September 30, 2011

Assignment: Analytic Snapshot of "Veil of Fears"

Genre:
“Veil of Fears” is a persuasive essay.

Purpose:
The purpose of this essay is to try to persuade people to change their poor view of the Muslim veil.

Central Message:
Veiling is not a bad thing, but rather it is a way of life.

World View and Assumptions:
There are many world views and assumptions made in this reading. The author discusses the Muslim traditional view where veiling is embraced as one of the keys and fundamentals to their way of life. He also mentions the modern view of the veil. This is a view that sees the veil as a prison that traps women. The idea of trusting in state government versus family was another topic discusses in this essay. I also feel like the author made reference to family issues a lot. He referenced family in the American way (mom, dad, and children), as well as in a “partilineage” way (“band of brothers”).

Use of Tools and Evidence:
It was really hard for me to identify tools and evidence of persuasive writing, probably because I’ve never done it before! I did think that the author tried really hard to appeal to emotions, especially those relating to family issues. Once you have a reader feeling emotionally attached to your point of view, it is fairly easy to convince them to believe the rest of what you are trying to say. Another tool that he used was in referring to modern television. When he mentioned the negative influence of TV in the home, he had me convinced. But, then I had to take a step back and look if it was really a valid connection and valid proof. Overall, I had a really hard time finding tools and evidence. :(

Tuesday, September 27, 2011

Learning to Appreciate Life

Hey all! For my writing class we just finished writing personal narratives. I thought it would be fun to post it, just in case any of you wanted to read my little story. :) I think it's pretty good, but I am a bit biased.


“Brittany! You have to figure out where you are! At least find a street sign.” Mom yelled through the phone.
“Mom, I don’t know where--- I’m at the intersection of Green and Maple. I think I should--”
“Green and Maple? Where are you? Would you just pull over and ask someone?” Mom was past the point of getting mad. It wasn’t my fault that we’d gotten lost. The instructions had been confusing and I had never driven in this big city before. I didn’t understand why she was so upset with me. I just wanted to cry.
And so I did. “Mom, please don’t get mad at me,” I mumbled into the phone as the warm tears started falling down my cheeks. “I’m trying my best, but I can’t find anywhere to stop and ask.”
“Then pull into someone’s driveway, knock on the door, and ASK! It’s not that hard Brittany!”
“Fine.” I hung up the phone defeated. I was tired of being yelled at.
My sisters and I had been in Indianapolis all day- I’d had a doctor’s appointment and then we’d gone shopping. We’d left the store in plenty of time to get home, eat dinner, and leave for musical rehearsal. We’d been on the same two roads for 30 minutes. Finally we decided to try a different road. Yes, we probably should’ve called someone for directions or at least stopped at a store and asked, but I was determined to do it on my own!
My phone rang and I anxiously answered it. I was relieved to hear the voice of my uncle who was from this horrible city in which I was lost. He directed us back to a known road and we were on our way home.
As I drove the forty-five minutes home, I just couldn’t calm down. I was so frustrated! Why couldn’t I follow directions right? Why did Mom have to get so worked up about everything? I didn’t even want to think about the lecture we’d receive for being late to musical rehearsal.
We’re almost home! Only ten miles to go! I thought to myself. The roads were still a little damp from a storm that had just passed by so I was extra careful. I made sure I was going the speed limit and paying special attention to the cars around me. Suddenly there was a white car only inches from us.
The scenes flashed by as I was watching a movie. The white car. My family. The ditch. Smoke. The surreal moment passed by in mere seconds.
“Everyone get out of the car!!!!!” my older sister, Kailee, shouted.
The car is on fire, it’s going to exploded, and we are all going to die. What had I done? I thought. I got out of the car as fast as I could. I had to see if my sisters were okay. A wave of relief hit me the moment I finally saw my sisters, Kailee and Alexis.
What now? We all thought. We’re all okay, but we just wrecked. “Should I call the police or Mom?” Kailee asked shakily.
“Ummm… I guess call Mom and tell her first,” I hesitantly said. I had no idea what to expect. Why is my nose runny? I thought. I quickly wiped my nose with my finger, embarrassed that I had snot all over the place. I quickly learned that it wasn’t snot, but rather blood. And that’s when the shock set in.
            “Brittany, are you okay? You just got really white,” Alexis said.
            “I don’t feel good. Everything is going black….” I started to say. But before I could finish my sentence a man and his wife had laid me on the cold damp grass.
            “My name is Matthew. This is my wife Sarah. We are volunteer firefighters and were right behind you when you had your accident. We’ve already called for an ambulance. I’m just going to check your pulse and a few other vital things.” Wait… did I hear him right? An ambulance? Was I really that bad? I started to realize how much pain I was in.
            “Owww…” I whimpered as the man lifted my arm. “That arm really hurts.”
            “Okay. Tell me where it hurts most.” He instructed me.
            “My face and arm hurt really bad,” I slowly managed to tell him. “And my wrist and hands. I can’t move them.” I was beginning to cry, but I told myself to suck it up. At least you are alive, Brittany.
            “Brittany! Oh my gosh!!!” Kailee started freaking out.
            “It’s alright. You’re going to be okay,” Alexis tried to reassure me. But I didn’t know if I could believe that.
            “Lex, it hurts so bad,” I sobbed. “What did I do? Why did this happen?”
            “It’s not your fault, Brit. Everything is going to be fine. Just focus on breathing.”
            Then I heard the sirens. Was I relieved, or did the sirens just seem to make things worse? Definitely both. I knew they were coming to help me, but I didn’t want their help. I didn’t want to go to the hospital, I wanted to go home and see my family. I wanted everything to be okay. I needed to see my mom and dad.
            The paramedics arrived at the scene and explained what they were going to do. They carefully put me in a neck brace and lifted me on to a stretcher. They then continued to strap my arms and legs down. I literally thought I was going to die. Why else would they be doing all of this to me? I thought I was okay. After being thoroughly trapped down to the stretcher, I was lifted into the ambulance.
            Seconds later I saw my dad climbing into the ambulance. A rush of emotion overfell me. “Daddy!” I said as the tears fell faster. “I’m so sorry. I didn’t mean to. I just—“
            “Brittany, I am so glad you are all okay. Don’t worry about anything. You just focus on getting better. We’re going to get you to the hospital and double check to make sure nothing is broken. Stay strong for a little while longer. Mom and I will see you at the hospital, okay?”
            I tried to shake my head, but the determined neck brace wouldn’t let me budge. “Okay,” I mumbled. As he walked away I pushed back another wave of uncontrollable tears. So many thoughts were racing through my head as I was rushed to the hospital. How’d I get so lucky? I sure don’t know. But, I’m so thankful to be alive. I wonder if the sirens are on… if all the cars are pulling over to let the ambulance through. Are Kailee and Alexis really okay? I’m so thankful I’m the one who got hurt. I would feel terrible if I had killed or even just hurt my sisters. Is the person from the other car okay? What about my car? I wonder what it looks like now. Will I ever get to see it again? What’s Mom going to say? I can’t wait to see her. I hope my arm isn’t broken……
            The paramedic in the ambulance sat next to me. He had a smile on his face and a reassuring air about him. “How are you doing?” he asked.
            “Well, I’ve definitely been better,” I joked.
            “I like that answer,” he smiled. “I know that you are probably not very comfortable and I’m really sorry about that. We just have to be extremely cautious; we don’t want to hurt you more.”
            “Yeah, I understand.” The paramedic continued to tell me a little bit about himself and then asked me questions about my family and interests. He asked about some details about the accident, probably to make sure that I hadn’t received a concussion. I don’t remember his name or even what he looked like, but I remember being so grateful to have such a compassionate man assisting me.   
            As we got closer to the hospital he explained what would happen when we got there. “I’ll just roll you out of the ambulance, and that’s the last you’ll see of me!” he said.
            “Thank you so much for everything!” I didn’t think I could say it enough. I was so thankful for this angel in my life. When he had first seen me I was a wreck. My emotions were uncontrollable and I was in utter shock. And as he lifted me out of the ambulance I felt almost normal. My nervousness and feelings of fear were gone. I was just happy to be alive! Who cares if I had broken my nose, arm, wrist, and seven of ten fingers? I was blessed with the chance to wake up the next morning. I could spend more time with my baby sister. I had been given the chance to make memories of my own.
            The emergency room was like a zoo. It took what seemed like years for anything to happen. The doctor came in and gave me some pain medication and once again checked all my vitals. I went through x-ray after x-ray and then waited. And waited. And waited some more. Finally the doctor came back with the results from the x-rays. With no signs of broken bones or anything too serious, I was cleared to go home. I couldn’t wait to lie in my bed and hold my baby sister’s hand again.
            Life wasn’t easy after the accident. Just because I wasn’t broken anywhere did not mean that I looked normal. The airbags had been kind enough to give me a black eye, a blue check, and a purple swollen lip, as well as a nose the size of Texas. I was in lots of pain and I had many setbacks. The medicine messed me up and I couldn’t figure myself out half the time. But overall, I was grateful to be on the path of recovery.
            As the ideas began to flow for the writing of this essay I met a new friend. After talking to him for a few hours he felt impressed to tell me the story of his fiancĂ©e, who had been killed in a car accident. I can’t even imagine the pain this young man must have gone through. However because of my accident I had a greater compassion and understanding of his situation. I don’t know why my life was spared and this other girl’s was not, but I know it is for a reason. I am grateful for every minute, of every day that I am blessed to be on this beautiful Earth.

I am so grateful for this wonderful life we have to live!!! What a beautiful blessing from our Father in Heaven.


-Brittany :)

Assignment: Personal Narrative Follow Up!

       I really had a great time writing my personal narrative. For as much as I dislike writing, this paper was actually fun! The topic that I wrote about, my car accident, influenced my life more than I thought. I enjoyed thinking about many blessings and positive things that have come from this experience in my life. One of the hardest parts about writing the narrative was knowing what to include and what to leave out. As I read over my paper the last few times, it brought back many additional memories that I wish I could have included. I also thought the peer reviewing was difficult. I tried to have an open mind about things, but it was still really difficult for me. It was hard to balance between what I thought was best and what they thought was best. I had a really fun time thinking about the best ways to describe my situation and the thoughts that were running through my head. I also called up my friend the night before the paper was due to see if he could help me out. I ended up going over to his house and reading him my paper. It was fun to read my paper, and I think he had fun listening as well. It was just an overall cool experience. It also really opened my eyes to things that sounded awkward or just plain stupid! Overall I had a pretty great time with this paper. I definitely had struggles, but the positives outweighed the negatives!!! :)

Sunday, September 18, 2011

Sunday Scripture

Helaman 5:12

"And now, my sons, remember, remember that it is upon the rock of our Redeemer, who is Christ, the Son of God, that ye must build your foundation; that when the devil shall send forth his mighty winds, yea, his shafts in the whirlwind, yea, when all his hail and his mighty storm shall beat upon you, it shall have no power over you to drag you down to the gulf of misery and endless wo, because of the rock upon which ye are built, which is a sure foundation, a foundation whereon if men build they cannot fall."

How grateful I am for this scripture. It has helped me through so much in my life! I am so grateful that we have the chance to continue striving to build our foundation on Christ. He is the ultimate source of truth, and I'm so thankful that I can trust in Him. I know that this scripture is true. I know that the devil will send forth all his hail and his mighty storms. But I also know that if we rely on Christ we can have the strength and power to overcome all that may come our way. It won't be easy... as a matter of fact, it will be terrifyingly hard at times. But, He will never leave us. I know my Savior loves me and stands ready to lift me up at any moment.

Thursday, September 15, 2011

Assignment: Personal Narrative Progress

My personal narrative is coming along... slowly. :) I’m really struggling with where to start and what to include. I love telling stories, but for some reason when I have to write them they just are not as fun! I also often find myself trying to think of big and impressive words to make the story sound better. Striking a balance between giving this paper my own voice and making the paper acceptable for my audience is difficult.
I’m also really struggling with how to wrap it all up. I know what I want to say, but I just don’t know how to say it right. I want to make sure that the purpose of my paper is clear without having to come right out and say it.
I am really excited to go to the writing lab and have someone read over my paper. I also can’t wait for Monday when we will be peer editing! I think that having another person read over my paper and critique it will help me get a better sense of what I need to do to improve it.
Writing has always been stressful for me, so it isn’t surprising that this paper hasn’t been a piece of cake. :) I have enjoyed thinking about my topic and remembering how it has changed me. I’m thankful that we get to start with a personal narrative, because writing about myself is a lot easier than critically analyzing or researching!

Tuesday, September 13, 2011

Assignment: I Love My Daddy

I really enjoyed reading Sarah Nielsen’s personal narrative about her dad. While my dad is not the same as hers, I have a great love and appreciation for my dad. I loved her line about how she didn’t want to marry someone like her dad, but some wanted to marry someone just like her dad. As weird as it might be to some people, I’ve had the very similar thoughts. My dad is the best guy that I know. He is one of my best friends and someone that I can trust and depend on. My dad isn’t perfect by any means, but he means the world to me. If I could find someone as loving, compassionate, caring, respectful, hardworking, and just plain out as amazing as my dad, I would not let him pass by too fast.
As I read this narrative I thought about how difficult it would be to have a father who was an alcoholic and constantly in and out of jail. But, I also thought about the valuable lesson of forgiveness that Sarah Nielsen had to learn. This alcoholic, this prisoner, was her father. She loved him and therefore forgiving him was important in her life. I’m sure it wasn’t easy to forgive him time after time, and she even mentions how sometimes she didn’t understand why she forgave him so quickly, but nonetheless she forgave. Forgiveness is a powerful gift, and Sarah certainly had it!
This particular narrative, compared to the others I tried to read, was a lot easier to understand and follow. I really appreciated the voice of the author as she described her dad. I feel like I came to know him as a person, which made it easier for me to accept how easily she forgave him. I enjoyed reading this narrative and it gave me lots of ideas for how to write mine!

Saturday, September 10, 2011

Luscious Lemon Bars

Kelsie and I made these delicious lemon bars... and they are like the BEST THING EVER!!! If you like lemon bars, or even you don't (because I didn't before this), I would strongly encourage you to try these. Just writing about them is making my mouth water. The recipe was originally found on allrecipes.com, but I've adopted it as my own. :) Here it is:


Ingredients:

Crust:
- 3/4 cup butter, softened
- 6 tablespoons (1/4 cup and 2 tablespoons) powdered sugar
- 1 1/2 cups all-purpose flour

Filling:
- 4 eggs
- 2 cups sugar
- 1/2 cup lemon juice
- 1/4 cup all-purpose flour
- 1/2 teaspoon baking powder


Directions:

1. In a small mixing bowl, cream butter and powdered sugar; gradually beat in flour. Press onto the bottom of an ungreased 9-in. x 13-in. pan. Bake at 325 degrees for about 15 minutes or until set and the edges are lightly browned. (don't overcook!!!)
2. For filling, in a mixing bowl, beat the egg, sugar, lemon juice, flour and baking pwder until frothy (so it starts to have bubbles on top- like hot chocolate). Pour over warm crust. Bake for about 20 minutes or until lightly browned. Cool on a wire rack. Dust with powdered sugar, cut into bars, and enjoy! 


Makes about 2-3 dozen bars.


Like I said- these are delicious! :)


Enjoy,


Future Chef Brittany :)

Friday, September 9, 2011

Quote: Adulthood

"The naivete of my presumptions about adulthood glared out at me from the sketchbook like a sickly bruise." (Jessie Hawkes, "My Father's Sketchbook")

             I love this quote!! When we are young we think we know it all. At least for me, as I was growing up I often thought that adulthood wouldn't be a challenge. Sure there are new experiences and hardships, but I thought I was invincible. But then adulthood came and I realized what a false and naive world I had been living in. Being an adult isn't bad, it just isn't really anything I expected! There are so many choices and decisions. I have to be responsible for myself. What is this? Oh yeah, this is life, and it's full of change- learning, growing, falling, failing, succeeding, and wishing.

Assignment: Families

In the narrative written by Claire Wallace, “Families (that have been torn, re-cut with dull scissors, and then messily glued back together) Are Forever”, the reader has the opportunity to experience a day (or two) in the life of Claire. I really appreciated her insight and view into what a family is. Her family was not perfect. As mentioned in the title, her family had been “reassembled” a few times, each time being the cause of a new struggle or learning experience. While I don’t have a “reassembled” family, I certainly don’t have a perfect family. Everyone has family issues- they are part of life on Earth. But, just as Claire had to overcome this little trial, we all have the opportunity and responsibility to do our best in our families.
I remember several times when I thought my life was over. I was so angry and frustrated- I just wanted to give up and not care anymore! It was in those moments though, that I was somehow reminded of my Heavenly Father’s love for me. Overwhelming feelings of love and compassion helped open my eyes to the eternal perspective of things. As the proclamation states, “The family is central to the Creator’s plan for the eternal destiny of His children”. The Proclamation DOES NOT state, “Families that have 2 parents, 5 kids, and never disagree about anything are the only families that count in Heaven.” Every family has its challenges. Every person has their weaknesses. I’m thankful for the family unit and for the Atonement of Christ that allows us to learn and love, forgive and forget, and try and try again.

Tuesday, September 6, 2011

Me in 100 Words!

My name is Brittany Rachelle Jensen.
I love nature, rain, thunderstorms, and flowers.
I appreciate organization, although I’m not an organized person.
I enjoy listening to the ocean waves, singing songs, and facing new challenges.
I am passionate about cooking. I love finding and trying new recipes, as well as creating my own.
I love dancing in the rain, lying in the street, and staying up late eating ice cream with my cousin.
I have a dream of either being a kindergarten teacher or starting my own preschool.
My favorite thing to do is spend time with my family.
I love serenity and chaos.
My life is good. :)